New Business website
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New Business website
Hi Guys,
new website up and running if you wanted a nosey
www.slaterandreeves.co.uk
Mwww.slaterandreevescatering.co.uk
feedback would be appreciated
regards
matt
new website up and running if you wanted a nosey
www.slaterandreeves.co.uk
Mwww.slaterandreevescatering.co.uk
feedback would be appreciated
regards
matt
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Re: New Business website
Looks the business mate as I said to you before .....got well shot of tired image of Grey Court Catering.....who would choose that name in the first place !
Much easier to sell business to business
Much easier to sell business to business
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Re: New Business website
Just seen a typo....on About page at the bottom..... check spelling of electronically
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Re: New Business website
Which page gav?
Oh and thanks for the feedback . 1 out of 600
members lol
Oh and thanks for the feedback . 1 out of 600
members lol
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Re: New Business website
Hi MIke,
Nice website design, did you do it yourself or use a designer?
Just a couple of things: Under the vending machine section the last line of the second paragraph needs looking at! You used the operated word operated. Also, I would use the word 'artisan' to describe your bread as it's the latest buzz word for fresh food! But perhaps just use the word 'water' instead of 'aqua' as it just sounds pretentious!!
Really good site though!
Nice website design, did you do it yourself or use a designer?
Just a couple of things: Under the vending machine section the last line of the second paragraph needs looking at! You used the operated word operated. Also, I would use the word 'artisan' to describe your bread as it's the latest buzz word for fresh food! But perhaps just use the word 'water' instead of 'aqua' as it just sounds pretentious!!
Really good site though!
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Re: New Business website
Thanks mark , will have a look at those errors.
I had a guy do the site for me , and who is this mike guy ?lol
Regards
Matt
I had a guy do the site for me , and who is this mike guy ?lol
Regards
Matt
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Re: New Business website
On About Page Matt
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Re: New Business website
I've no idea why I keep calling you mike... would it not be easier for you to change your name for me?
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Re: New Business website
Looks good Mike
He he
He he
Steve
Snackmore Vending
Fully managed vending services
Drinks | Snacks | Sweets | Toys | Rides | Washroom
www.snackmore.co.uk
Snackmore Vending
Fully managed vending services
Drinks | Snacks | Sweets | Toys | Rides | Washroom
www.snackmore.co.uk
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Re: New Business website
Hi Matt,
Great website, but I think you should get a professional to look over the text:
Too many negatives eg 'we are not a sandwich shop'
Too many repetitions: 'we can offer operated a fully operated service' 'Expertly sourced-----------who roast them expertly' 'Expertly' is the most commonly used word.
You say you guarantee 'Fast and free delivery' but it is subject to how much you order and location - that's not a guarantee.
'Try prospective business and you will benefit from an impressive turnover' does'nt make sense.
'Birmingham based branch' sounds like a regional location but no other branches are mentioned?
Get rid of 'rear of' in your address sounds like a back street location. many statements just don't make sense, grammar is everything in the corporate marketplace. I would suggest the text is re-written. Your business will be judged on it.
Regards
Pete
Great website, but I think you should get a professional to look over the text:
Too many negatives eg 'we are not a sandwich shop'
Too many repetitions: 'we can offer operated a fully operated service' 'Expertly sourced-----------who roast them expertly' 'Expertly' is the most commonly used word.
You say you guarantee 'Fast and free delivery' but it is subject to how much you order and location - that's not a guarantee.
'Try prospective business and you will benefit from an impressive turnover' does'nt make sense.
'Birmingham based branch' sounds like a regional location but no other branches are mentioned?
Get rid of 'rear of' in your address sounds like a back street location. many statements just don't make sense, grammar is everything in the corporate marketplace. I would suggest the text is re-written. Your business will be judged on it.
Regards
Pete